Changing our idea

Changing our Idea

From getting feedback from my initial idea, my group and I have come to a steady conclusion that we want to abandon our original decision. This is due to the fact that we have found a more interesting yet better idea! It is more thrilling and stimulating; especially to our target audience. We didn't like the part of involving texting with friends, this is mainly because it is mainstream and not very original. It has been done before which we didn't like, and we wanted to change it to something that hadn't been done ever before. 

Therefore, our new idea starts off with a girl walking along the road, we see several eye line matches of a car driving past. Its dark. Its deserted, maybe near something such as a canal. She's taken, she's put in the boot of the car, we hear screaming from her, we hear her punching then bonnet. We see the drivers eye line match  in the mirror, he gets a shovel out and parks under a tree in a large field.

It then cuts to a news anchor on a news report, giving another example of a dead body found in that area. The next clip we see is him pinning her picture up in a board with other victims 

My group and I have decided to change this to a montage of the victim lying down and covered in blood. A girl will be isolated in the vulnerable and deserted location, making the audience ponder as to what will happen next. Therefore, this will make it less mainstream and a lot more original! 

The first bit of feedback we received was that the texting clip of the opening sequence was a bit too predictable, and maybe a bit too obvious. Therefore we decided to exclude that, so it wasn't in the 2 minute sequence. We decided as a result of this, to then add a montage of different pictures, showing our victim lying in blood instead, rather than focusing on her being captured, it focuses on her murder, creating more tension and making the audience feel slightly more intrigued as to what the rest of the sequence holds.

We also decided to focus on pictures of the previous victims, so that we could demonstrate the fact that the unknown kidnapped is in fact a  is a serial offender. The idea being that the rest of the film will be about a cat and mouse game before any one tries finds him. Additionally, giving the audience more of a background to our opening sequence so they're more aware of what the sequence it is really about.

Having received feedback, we've re-worked some of the shots and the opening sequence, and are looking at trying to show the event itself and make the victim superfluous to requirements. We are going to use her as the way into the narrative, which will be about the police trying to capture the serial killer. Whereas before, the narrative was more about the father trying to get the girl before she gets killed. We feel that this change in narrative will make it more suitable to an opening sequence of the film.